Cheese

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42 Responses to Cheese

  1. leec says:

    Hard to read we think you should concentrate on your spelling.

  2. ahmeh says:

    I like it but work on your spelling.

  3. karae says:

    You have an outstanding blog but improve please on your spelling.

  4. murpa says:

    Your blog is very creative and would lure people in easily but it could be improved by correcting spellings and make it a bit clearer.

    from Blake and Adam

  5. ahmej says:

    Why is the letter moving?

  6. ahmeh says:

    I like it but work on your spelling.

  7. buccs1 says:

    You did a very good job but I DONT think its very necessery.

  8. towni1 says:

    Very interesting but you could improve it and check spelling. Sorry to say but we don’t think it makes sense.

  9. whilz1 says:

    Well done on your first blogg .Try and focus on your spelling and it was very hard to read and understand .

  10. chemn says:

    A good blog Mr Mahew
    I think you should focus on your spelling

  11. durkp1 says:

    It is a little funny but put less pictures and I think you are lying about the £10000.

  12. whilz1 says:

    It was also quite creative

  13. mohah says:

    Maybe you need some pictures of a mouse eating cheese with smell coming of it. Also ! like the puzzle that you made but if i were you I would make the size bigger.from Julius and Hanad.

  14. karae says:

    Otherwise your blog is amazing!

  15. mankj says:

    We really like your blog but there may be a few errors.
    1.the words lik, bloog and wurd,do you mean like, blog and word.

    2.try not to write upside down we can’t read it

    3.Don’t spin the words around,we get confused .

    we had really enjoyed your blog.

  16. buccs1 says:

    It isn’t very necessery to blog something silly.

  17. coxl says:

    I like your blog (especially the mouse) !But you should check it again because you made some spelling mistakes. Also you said you would give us £10000 if we liked your blog but you won’t!I’m sorry but we think it doesn’t make sense.

  18. leec says:

    It was good but hard to read

  19. mohah says:

    I like it but you need to improve on your spelling

  20. leec says:

    I like your blog but you could focus a bit more next time . from Elsie and Caitlin

  21. johnc says:

    I like your blog (especially the mouse which the cheese )!But here are some ways to improve it:Firstly I spotted some spelling mistakes like “blog” was spelt “bloog”. Secondly you put ” There is cheese all over the world!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!” spinning a bit to fast so it is tricky to read.Thirdly the puzzle is really difficult to make I tried to make it but I failed so I think you should make it easier.Finally you said you would give me £10000 if we liked your blog but I don’t really think you would.
    I’m sorry but I don’t really understand it I just don’t think it makes sense.

  22. mulck1 says:

    We like your blog but we think you could make a few improvements for e.g spellings only one ! but well done for having a go.
    Isabel and Nika

  23. herrm says:

    We like your blog but you need to check your spellings.Maybe you should not make your writing go round and upside down.

    Maddie and Sashka

  24. elsah1 says:

    I like your blog but check your spelling before you send it but your one was very creative because it show you put effort
    into your presentation
    from christo and Hussein

  25. nawzd says:

    I really like the cheese puzzle but work on spelling and make it more clear.

    Daryan and Krishan

  26. ahmaa says:

    I like your blog but you should improve your spellings and I don’t know were you get the money from.I couldn’t read the spinning words because it was to fast to read.And the puzzle was to tricky so make it easier. Aryan and William

  27. parma says:

    I think is very cool but you have to check your spelling if it is right or wrong.

    Abhi

  28. sweef1 says:

    We like your blog because of all your creative ideas but you should work on your spellings.We think that you need to work a bit more on your presentation. Here are some handy hints to help you:
    Firstly, you put a million exclamation marks,
    Secondly, you put ” there is cheese all over the wurld!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! spinning so quickly we couldn’t read it.
    Lucia & Flora

  29. sandb1 says:

    We like the animation,improve your spelling
    Bhim & Thibault

  30. sahot says:

    We think you need some spelling lessons and don’t write upside down next time because you can’t read it properly because it spins too fast. We like the picture of the mouse! Maybe you should concentrate on adding more information next time.

    Taran and Zara

  31. baots says:

    Very good creative, fabulous diagram but next time don’t make upside down writing because it’s too complex.

    Inian, Leo and Stella

  32. aikis says:

    Where would you get the money from? It is quite pointless to put all those exclamation marks . # spinning words hard to read but it’s funny.

  33. malis says:

    You are being creative, the exclamation marks are strange , we cant read your writing and concentrate From Alex B AND Sebastian

  34. sella says:

    We like the design and detail but all the exclamation marks are unnecessary.We like the creativity but we can’t read the writing that spins around.

    Alex-s Jaser

  35. sluml1 says:

    Your blog is funny for everybody to watch and you,ll really like it.
    We like your blog because its full of cheese but everything is upside down.I really like the mouse creeping to the cheese.

    by Omar and Lara

  36. glowe1 says:

    Is your blog suppose to be upside down? We think if your writing wasn’t upside down it would be a big improvement. We think it has some good ideas and we like the subject.

  37. mohim says:

    The pictures were very colourful and pretty,but your writing wasn’t very clear and it didn’t make sense. Also,we don’t think you were telling the truth about the £1OOOO! But, we could tell you spent a lot of time on your blog!

    MILLI & RIONA

  38. jnewman says:

    Good work, but check your spelling properly and don’t do too much exclamation marks . from Khyan and Adrian

  39. muram1 says:

    I like your blog because I like cheese but your words are upside down. Also you used to much exclamation marks and as well I don’t think the amount of money is realistic .

    Moana and Simeon

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